Cheesecake is yummy
but also very funny
i love it
and it is a fit
cows say moo
and they do
chew their cud
all day long, bud
eat food
when you're in the mood
for the dude
who sells stupid stuff on tv
"go home" he said to me
but i'd rather read
a story about girls
and their pretty little curls
so i stayed there
with that bear
named Marshall
i said i loved him
he said go take a hike
we decided to go to vegas
and got married at the drive-in
while ordering fries at McDonald's
Dear Miss Hamilton,
ReplyDeleteHoly Random! I both laughed and gagged in disgust at the forced rhymes and stream of consciousness flow of the poem. Great work at writing really, really bad poetry!
Sincerely,
Genevive Louise Noette
It was a very random poem and didn't make sense, but I like the line "I said I loved him" I could see that being in a good poem
ReplyDeleteI love your writing but I got have to say that this is just pure awful. Rhyming cud with bud? I rolled on the ground laughing.
ReplyDeleteBut I love the line that said "I said I loved him/he said go take a hike" I think everyone, well atleast me, can relate to that. Liking somebody but they don't share the same feelings.
You're an incredible writer Allie, so keep up the good work!!!!!!!!!!
It feels like a 9 year old wrote it, I really liked it.
ReplyDeleteMaybe when you are writing your second draft you can clarify what exactly you are talking about, and be consistant with that through the whole poem.
those were some of the most awful-to-goodness rhymes I've ever seen, and a terrible story to boot
ReplyDeleteI approve highly.
That was so random! I was laughing so hard reading this. my favorite part was getting married at the drive in while ordering fries at mcdonalds. keep up the good work!
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